#SampleSunday – Rusalka – #amwriting

My 11-year-old grandson read this and said, “That’s a good story! Creepy!” Mission accomplished. I took some liberties with the lore. Hire a lawyer and sue me. (turnip – blood = 0)

Rusalka 
by Marian Allen

I take up my pen with, if not tranquility, at least with composure — surprising, perhaps, in light of the past night’s events, if surprise were not by now beyond me.

Perhaps you will discount this as fictional. I would not blame you. I would envy your unbelief, the complacency which is so much more comfortable than the unnatural calm now left to me.

An opalescent moon shone like a precious stone on deep blue velvet. So bright it was, the stars, which ordinarily sparked across the seaside country sky, paled. I have seen days that were dimmer than that night. Dear heaven, was it only last night?

So bright it was at midnight, when I dimmed the study lamp, I scorned my bedroom and went, instead, out into the dewy quietude, down to the inlet where my people came to catch fish for my dinner. The full moon’s reflection floated upon its mirror surface, almost too lambent to look upon.

As I neared the water, the brilliant disk wavered, though there was no wind. The white circle rippled and rose, and resolved into a woman standing upon the surface. Was she dressed in white linen, which clung to her shape with the weight of its liquidity, or was she bare, wearing only inhumanly featureless flesh?

I could not say, but she was suddenly at the marshy edge, not illuminated by the moon above, but luminescent in herself. She held out her arms to me. She smiled, her lips red as coral.

“Who are you?” I thought, or perhaps I whispered it, for she smiled more broadly, showing teeth like pearls.

“Rusalka,” she whispered back, or perhaps she only thought it, for I did not see her mouth form the word, and yet I heard it.

I stepped into the mud, into the water, into her arms, and she drew me close. The chill damp crept up my body as we glided out and down, until the sea burned my eyes and I lost sight of her empty gaze.

With that, I came to myself. I gasped and thrashed, raising my mouth above the surface long enough to fill my lungs with precious air before my succubus, with infernal strength, pulled me back into her domain, down, down to the very floor of the inlet.

There, I saw unspeakable things: the corpses of men — yes, and of children — lured to deaths by this creature’s mesmerizing beauty. And, as I looked upon the hideous remains, I saw salvation. It was a blade: a fisherman’s knife, still sheathed at a dead man’s side.

I snatched it, drew it, held it, shoved it at the phantom’s face, pommel upwards, thrusting the shape of the Cross between damnation and myself.

Rusalka shoved herself away, the force sending me backward and upward. I broke the surface again, bellowing for air, weeping and praying as I flailed the eternal distance back to land.

I reached the fen that bordered the inlet and struggled toward solid ground. A cold hand clutched my shoulder and spun me around.

Again I raised my makeshift Cross and again the thing shrank back. Then the blood froze within my veins, for the monster lifted her head and laughed.

Laughter, I call it, for want of a better word, but no earthly laughter ever came so shrill and savage. The very beating of my heart slowed; my lungs refused to breathe, and I grew faint .

To save my life — to save my soul — I took a different grip upon my weapon. With the words, “Our Father, who art in heaven,” on my lips, I spent my final strength in an arcing blow, slicing the shining throat with tempered steel.

Without a sound, she vanished. I dropped my weapon and collapsed.

And so I lay, alone and senseless, until my people, missing me in the morning, found me and carried me to my bed.

I told them I slipped and fell, having taken a foolish moonlight stroll. How could I tell them the truth? They would have thought me mad. Indeed, my only hope for sanity is that I, myself, may come to believe the events of the night just past only happened in a dreadful dream.

To that purpose, I have penned this account and, when I have written THE END, will consign it to the flames of my bedroom fire.

THE END

A WRITING PROMPT FOR YOU: Write the above story from the point of view of the rusalka (Russian water spirit).

MA

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I was born in Louisville, Kentucky, but now live in the woods in southern Indiana. Though I only write fiction, I love to read non-fiction. The more I learn about this world, the more fantastic I see it is.

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One thought on “#SampleSunday – Rusalka – #amwriting

  1. Perry Block
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    May 6, 2012 at 6:58pm

    I may just take a crack at writing a story from the point of view of the Rusalka trying to spirit me away and deciding aquatic life’s just too short for such an annoying experience. Hmmm…..

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  2. Holly Jahangiri
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    May 7, 2012 at 8:16am

    Hahaha… I never hit enter on my comment last night. Whoooooops!

    Okay, so your suggestion for dealing with Kyliri was a good one – but she’s not a Rusalka, and I think it could just turn a bad situation worse.

    Actually, the first thing I thought, on reading this, was, “Your 11 year old grandson knows what a succubus IS??”

    This is so un-Llannonninn. It’s a fierce and violent side I hadn’t seen coming. I kind of like it. There’s just one problem: arcing slice to the neck would’ve yielded a lot of blood – more, I should think, than could be accounted for by “a fall.” Though if the fall is symbolic of the necessity of taking a life – any life – and subsequent spiritual fall…

    Y’know, I never liked that game in lit class, either. Good story, Marian – and I agree with your grandson. CREEPY!! (Also learned something. This was a creature I’d never heard of before.)
    Holly Jahangiri would love to share..The Stone CavernMy Profile

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      Marian Allen
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      May 7, 2012 at 8:29am

      I’m not sure my grandson knows what a succubus is, he just knew it was A Bad Thing. And there was no blood from the Rusalka, because she was a spirit. It wasn’t the loss of blood that destroyed her, it was the steel of the blade. I’ve just read too much Heroic Fantasy (and Anti-Heroic Fantasy), and I’m all like, there are few problems in life that couldn’t be solved by the judicious placement of a good, sharp knife.

      Un-Llannonninn — Yeah. The story comes out the way the story comes out. Sometimes sweet and tender, sometimes goofy and slapstick, sometimes fierce and violent. Keeps things interesting for me. 🙂

      MA

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